Sam's Draft Workshops

Draft Workshop Form - Nov. 4, 2004

1. My name is Mandy and I read Sam's paper.

2. Does the paper fulfill the demands of the assignment? Does it have
all of the elements we talked about in our class discussion? If not,
list what the author needs to do to fulfill the assignment.

You do a great job arguing your points, but explain the work you are
going to do. Would they really go for you thinking of a weekly topic
and them doing all of the work for your topic. Explain why they would
want to write about the restricted topics you would choose. Also, as a
picky detail, should you sign your letter??

3. The assignment asks you to convey your enthusiasm and to analyze
some recent posts to the blog. Assuming the author has done both of
these things, what kind of organizational scheme has s/he implemented
to integrate these two aspects of the paper? Does it make sense? Is it
effective rhetorically?

You did a great job analyzing the posts and applying them to your
paper. For organization you talk about how you will improve their blog
by your posts and then how important economics relates to their blog.
Your paper flowed nicely. Except for the second paragraph, think about
combining that with the first. Possibly?!?!

4. Is the author’s enthusiasm for the subject convincing? Does it
really sound like s/he is passionate about studying this discipline?
Is s/he over-enthusiastic? Suggest ways in which the author could
better pinpoint the level of enthusiasm you feel is appropriate for
the assignment.

You do seem very entusiastic but to the right degree. I mean how many
people are that interested is economics if they do not understand it
that well? Your willingness want to learn more shows your passion for
economics and will be admired by the bloggers.


Draft Workshop Form – November 9, 2004

1. My name is Mandy and I read Sam’s paper.

2. Does the paper fulfill the demands of the assignment? Does it have all of the elements we talked about in our class discussion? If not, list what the author needs to do to fulfill the assignment.

This paper fulfills all of the demands! Just expand more on how you coming up with ideas for them to post on is valuable to them. Are you going to simply say ok this week is Fastfood week and then they take it from there?? Or are you going to make a decent post with your analysis of fastfood and allow them to expand on that?

3. The assignment asks you to convey your enthusiasm and to analyze some recent posts to the blog. Assuming the author has done both of these things, what kind of organizational scheme has s/he implemented to integrate these two aspects of the paper? Does it make sense? Is it effective rhetorically?

You do seem very entusiastic but to the right degree. I mean how many people are that interested is economics if they do not understand it that well? Your willingness want to learn more shows your passion for economics and will be admired by the bloggers.You did a great job analyzing the posts and applying them to your paper. For organization you talk about how you will improve their blog by your posts and then how important economics relates to their blog. Your paper flowed nicely. Except for the second paragraph, think about combining that with the first. Possibly?!?!

4. We talked a lot in our class discussion on Thursday about tone. Briefly describe the tone the author has adopted for the letter. Is this tone appropriate? Would a slight (or drastic, for that matter) shift in tone benefit the paper?

The tone seems to work well. I do not know how I would tell you to change it. You are being very polite and asking for permission while explaining your case.


Draft Workshop Form - Nov. 23, 2004

1.My name is Mandy Lloyd and I read Sam's paper.

2. Does the paper explain how blogs will help or hinder their chosen
field? Explain why and why not?

You say it is helpful because it delivers information to a large
audience in a short amount of time. When you mention the information
is up to date, explain why this is important in economics. If
possible, give an example of how blogs are a good supplement to a your
professors published work.

3. How does the author use the article and professor from Feeder 1 and
2 in their unit project? Do they use example from posts, citations
from the article, etc?

You do a great job explaining the marginal revolution and how it
helped with a specific event, the Presidential Election.

4. Does the author use outside research to supplement their sources
from Feeder 1 and 2? What types of sources did they use?

When discussing blogging as a phenomenon you do a good job of bringing
in the example of the Red Sox blog. Maybe you should find an example
of another type of blog too!

5. Does the author use their experience with blogs in developing their
argument? Do they talk about how using blogs in our class helped or
hindered our work in class?

Wow, great assessment!! I like how mentioned that with blog draft
workshops you do not have to fumble through papers!