Draft Workshop 11/11
1. My name is Sam Kimball and I read Zach Waterman’s paper.
2. Does the article or book the author has chosen to analyze fulfill the requirements for an “academic” source? Explain why or why not.
From this stage in Zach’s paper, it is difficult to tell whether or not the article fulfills the requirements for an “academic” source. Only the title of the article is given. The source of the article, where it was published, is not provided. Therefore, it is difficult to determine the credibility of the source and, therefore, the credibility of the article itself.
3. Does the paper fulfill the requirement to explain how the research presented in the article advances study in the author’s field? How, exactly, does the paper go about accomplishing this? Do you feel the requirement is fulfilled sufficiently? Explain your answers.
There is no evidence of how the research advances studies in the field. While Zach does a good job of breaking down the article into simpler fragments that are easier to understand and analyze, he does not provide information on how this article relates back to the overall field. Zach needs to revisit the prompt and make sure to cover all aspects of the assignment.
4. The assignment asks you to “Target your essay toward an audience who is well-educated, but may not have much expertise in this particular field.” Has the author done this? If the tone is off, cite specific examples of where the author has gone wrong and suggest ways that the content of the paper could be adjusted to fix the problem. If you think paper does use the proper tone, highlight one or two specific examples from the paper that support your claim.
Zach does a very good job of targeting his essay. In this day and age, it is very likely that an educated person will be somewhat familiar with the internet. With that assumption, Zach aims his essay towards those who can grasp the internet concept. The jargon used, however, does seem a little stuffy, but overall it targeted very well to the appropriate audience.
2. Does the article or book the author has chosen to analyze fulfill the requirements for an “academic” source? Explain why or why not.
From this stage in Zach’s paper, it is difficult to tell whether or not the article fulfills the requirements for an “academic” source. Only the title of the article is given. The source of the article, where it was published, is not provided. Therefore, it is difficult to determine the credibility of the source and, therefore, the credibility of the article itself.
3. Does the paper fulfill the requirement to explain how the research presented in the article advances study in the author’s field? How, exactly, does the paper go about accomplishing this? Do you feel the requirement is fulfilled sufficiently? Explain your answers.
There is no evidence of how the research advances studies in the field. While Zach does a good job of breaking down the article into simpler fragments that are easier to understand and analyze, he does not provide information on how this article relates back to the overall field. Zach needs to revisit the prompt and make sure to cover all aspects of the assignment.
4. The assignment asks you to “Target your essay toward an audience who is well-educated, but may not have much expertise in this particular field.” Has the author done this? If the tone is off, cite specific examples of where the author has gone wrong and suggest ways that the content of the paper could be adjusted to fix the problem. If you think paper does use the proper tone, highlight one or two specific examples from the paper that support your claim.
Zach does a very good job of targeting his essay. In this day and age, it is very likely that an educated person will be somewhat familiar with the internet. With that assumption, Zach aims his essay towards those who can grasp the internet concept. The jargon used, however, does seem a little stuffy, but overall it targeted very well to the appropriate audience.
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