Draft Workshop 11/4
1. My name is Sam Kimball and I read Mandy Lloyd's paper.
2. Mandy definitely conveys her enthusiasm for the subject, as well as explaining her background in speech pathology. She talks about working with a speech pathologist and helping children of different ages and seeing how they develop speech. She also talks about how the classes she has taken here at UNC will aid her in adding to the professor's blog. However, there is one major thing that this paper/letter is lacking. She does not analyze posts from the professor's blog. She mentions one post in her first sentence, but that is it. She needs to go into further detail when analyzing the posts from the blog.
3. She does have clear structure as far as separating different topics goes. She stays on topic when talking about her experience and background in speech pathology. She has many examples and evidence of the her knowledge of the subject. However, there are some places where very lengthy paragraphs can be shortened or turned into separate ones. Since she did not really analyze posts on the blog, it is difficult to assume a structure for this aspect of the paper.
4. Yes. The author's enthusiasm for the subject is convincing. She has a genuine love for helping children with their problems and this shows through in her letter. She expresses her enthusiasm by talking about her knowledge of the field and the students she has helped in the post. Her words on dealing with children with difficulty developing speech are truly heartfelt and you can tell.
2. Mandy definitely conveys her enthusiasm for the subject, as well as explaining her background in speech pathology. She talks about working with a speech pathologist and helping children of different ages and seeing how they develop speech. She also talks about how the classes she has taken here at UNC will aid her in adding to the professor's blog. However, there is one major thing that this paper/letter is lacking. She does not analyze posts from the professor's blog. She mentions one post in her first sentence, but that is it. She needs to go into further detail when analyzing the posts from the blog.
3. She does have clear structure as far as separating different topics goes. She stays on topic when talking about her experience and background in speech pathology. She has many examples and evidence of the her knowledge of the subject. However, there are some places where very lengthy paragraphs can be shortened or turned into separate ones. Since she did not really analyze posts on the blog, it is difficult to assume a structure for this aspect of the paper.
4. Yes. The author's enthusiasm for the subject is convincing. She has a genuine love for helping children with their problems and this shows through in her letter. She expresses her enthusiasm by talking about her knowledge of the field and the students she has helped in the post. Her words on dealing with children with difficulty developing speech are truly heartfelt and you can tell.
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