Draft Workshop Form – October 7, 2004

1. My name is Maria and I read McLain’s paper.

2. What do you think are the most promising counter-arguments to the author’s claim? Have these counter-arguments been acknowledged and dealt with effectively in the paper?
That Bush’s strategy to increase for dual enrollment is more promising than Kerry’s idea for service because it give the student an opportunity to get some electives and other transfer credits out of the way before graduating high school, therefore making college a little shorter. This argument has not been addressed effectively, in that, there is not enough detail as to why this isn’t a better idea than Kerry’s.


3. Does the paper have a tight, cohesive and powerful thesis statement?
Yes, thesis is somewhat cohesive because a few points in the paper contradict the statement. (i.e. Dual enrollment)


4. Does the author make use of the varied rhetorical strategies we discussed in class? Does the author overuse any particular strategy? Does s/he neglect any?
Stastics and comparison are used for making Kerry’s idea look better but some of the comparisons lack the efficient detail to support the claim.


5. Does the author support his or her assumptions and conclusions with authoritative evidence? Identify at least one point that might be supported by additional or alternative types of evidence.
The point that Bush’s plan for dual enrollmmet needs more info to pursuade the reader to believe that it is not better than Kerry’s idea because it contradicts the whole paper.