October 5 Draft Workshop

1. My name is Maria and I read McLain’s paper.

2. Does the paper fulfill the demands of the assignment? Does it recommend a specific course of action relating to the issue?
The paper discusses a specific course of action that Kerry wants for education, which the option of service to the country. It meets the demands of the assignment; however, there does not seem to be enough argument as to why Kerry’s position is more reputable.


3. Does the paper have a tight, cohesive and powerful thesis statement?
The thesis clearly states the issue that is going to be addressed as well as how it will benefit the country more than Bush’s plan.


4. Does the author make use of the varied rhetorical strategies we discussed in class? Does the author overuse any particular strategy? Does s/he neglect any?
Statistics and comparisons are used to support Kerry’s strategy vs. Bush’s strategy. They are just stated in the paper, however, without very much detail as to the importance.


5. Did you find the author’s argument convincing? Why or why not?
The paper was not very convincing. The comparison to Bush’s plan is made the argument seem questionable. Leaves reader with the question: which is best? There were a lot of statements about Bush’s plan being worse, but not enough detail to convince the reader fully that Kerry’s is better.